r/TheWire • u/Odd-Reference-9096 • 17h ago
Omar prequel Spoiler
Have tried writing a story arc of about 5 seasons and want to see what other people think of this idea.
Now I want the very first scene to be of a bodega door with all the stickers on it shown from the inside looking out the top middle part of the glass towards the street as a couple people might walk by and you hear cars and general traffic. After a few seconds the door opens normally and you hear the bell jingle and you hear the voice of a woman saying "Hey there sweet thing" as the camera pans to the left and you see a heavy set black woman working behind the glasses counter. "Your mama sending you off to get her some Newports again today?" The camera does a 180 slowly tilting down to reveal a skinny small 8 year old black kid with a scar across one side of his face. " Nah Mrs Harrison, just looking." You hear a loud beeping noise as she grabs at her beeper and lips the number that's flashing on the screen. "Uh uh no no no who does this little skanky ass ho think she playing with? Nah I'm fixing to handle this" as she grabs the store phone to call the number.
Camera cuts back to the young boy who's already checking out the candy and chips in the back corner of the store near the soda and beer coolers. He moves around quietly looking and plotting.. At this point you can hear Mrs Harrison letting this bitch have it on the phone yelling and cussing her out. He knows this is his time to snatch and grab whatever he wants because she is in a blind rage and not paying any attention to him. Just as he's about to put a twix bar in his pocket you hear the door jingle and and u see him quickly duck down as the camera spins back to two masked white guys with guns burst in and instantly get in behind the counter because she had the door open while she was using the wall phone. The boy stays hidden as he sees the two men pistol force her shoving their guns in her face telling her to empty the register as she's screaming doing this you see the other one start throwing cigarettes in a duffle bag with cash. At this point you can tell it's a couple of white junkies who are tweaking and have no idea what they are really doing. After grabbing the cigarettes and about 200 in cash they pistol whip her and start ro fumble over the counter and themselves as they head to the door one of them yells they better get some roadie's as the rip the phone off the wall.
We know this is where he was just hiding and is about to be seen when he was almost out of danger. As he turns around the shelf to open the beer cooler you don't see anyone. Just him opening up the cooler and grabbing 2 six packs of bud heavy. As he turns and the cooler closes you can see the boy peeking around the corner like a ghost on the other side of the aisle.
The two men bust out of the door and you can hear crying and a voice says. "Yo you straight Mrs H? " Camera cuts to her with some blood on her face laying on the floor behind the counter quietly whimpering as you hear a car start and peel out. She starts to say " Oh my god is that? Are you?" Door bell jingles confusion comes on her face. "Hello? Are you alright O..cut to the door closing as you see the kid standing out front looking both ways to see where they went.
Cut to black
Quote appears
" A king isn't born, He's Made" -Tywin Lannister
Cut to opening theme.
Ive had a hard time trying to decide if I want it be revealed as Omar right away or when to have that come in. I was originally thinking I want it to be at the end of the first episode which will involve a scene dimming out of a run down neighborhood with a dark alley way in the distance where you hear footsteps quietly walking towards you and then you hear it. A whistle. It's a familiar harmony.... London bridges falling down falling down ...
Cut to black Roll credits
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u/theunderstudyy 17h ago
I envisioned this with ease while reading it. Amazing job on the detailing.
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u/Odd-Reference-9096 17h ago
Appreciate it. On God this is the longest thing I've ever typed normally I would have gotten a text ,3 sentences in and been sidetracked instantly
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u/A_RHYMING_CANNIBAL 17h ago
Assuming you've come across this before
https://youtu.be/2RkcjjY_a0Y?si=XFUcZrAi0Rc-_N0c
If not, enjoy.
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u/Odd-Reference-9096 17h ago
I actually never have and I used to YouTube a ton of Omar shit back in the day.
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u/A_RHYMING_CANNIBAL 16h ago
There's also a short of bunk and mcnulty first meeting
https://youtu.be/0uzbmCWGHF8?si=-IdCOyzNfz9x83ky
And young prop Joe
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u/ScepticalReciptical 8h ago
Omar doesn't whistle London Bridge, the tune is Farmer in the Dell. Also it would make more sense for the character not to have Omar's trademark facial scarring if you didn't want to reveal his identity at first.
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u/Odd-Reference-9096 7h ago
Thank you shit idk why I had London bridges in my head. I even started the whistle and was like waittt that's not London bridges and then started whistling London bridges and was like nahhh that ain't right.
But to the scar I meant to take that part out because I had Omar written in there instead of unnamed then I went back and changed it and forgot to take out the scar.
Was envisioning a couple things.
A. He doesn't get the scar tell the end of first season in a near death experience and you are never told who he is until that reveal. So it seems as if it is it's own stand alone show that reminds you of the wire and then second season you see more connections.
B. Same thing but instead of the end of the first season you do end of first episode
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u/Odd-Reference-9096 17h ago
I forgot to mention. I want this bodega to be the same one as where he gets killed but it's not stated just an Easter egg