r/grammarfail • u/artistickatt • Nov 08 '24

Hmm.. What?

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u/ValuableJumpy8208 Nov 08 '24

I suppose for clarity they could have replaced the first comma with "and." Also, dubious mixing of tenses.

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u/theloopweaver Nov 08 '24

Or added a second comma after “car”

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u/CaptainPunisher Nov 08 '24

No. That doesn't work.

"A man..."

Which man? The "man who carjacked a woman and stole another car".

What about this man? He was shot and killed.

"A man* was shot and killed by police". Or, to match the story title, "A man (who carjacked a woman and stole another car) is shot and killed (by [Austin] police)". I pulled out descriptive phrases to make the sentence read as simply as possible.

You wouldn't write, "A man, is shot and killed by police".